Screenplays are meant to be taut, precise, almost effortless reads. But there are common dialogue problems that muddy a screenplay’s purity, leaving your reader trudging through page after page of gobbledygook. Luckily these issues are easy to spot during a rewrite. Take a read through four common dialogue problems that you can probably find (and fix) right now.

1. Fluffy Dialogue

We recently wrapped the SoCreate “Get Writing” One-Page Screenplay Competition, and the results are fascinating. Where some writers complained that “it’s simply impossible” to fit a properly formatted scene on a single page in a traditional screenplay, others succeeded with flying colors. The successes removed the fluff.

For example, there’s no reason for this …

Dialogue Example 1

When you can write this …

Dialogue Example 2

See how much stronger that interaction becomes without the overwritten dialogue? Screenwriters often forget how much dialogue is implied, not spoken.

2. Writing What Should Be Subtext

Sometimes writers blatantly state subtext in dialogue. Subtext should not be stated. See what I did there? For example:

Dialogue Example 3

Little Sammy didn’t have to say much of anything to let his dad know that they had a time sensitive problem on their hands. This would have been better:

Dialogue Example 4

Show, don’t tell.

3. Using Complete Sentences

Grammarians beware: a screenplay is no place for you. Dialogue is a true representation of how we speak to each other. It’s not formal, unless your character is formal. Are you using too many complete sentences in your screenplay? Try reading the lines aloud with a friend, and revise based on how those lines would be spoken in real life. Shake out that stiffness!

For example:

Dialogue Example 5


Dialogue Example 64. Too Much Actor Direction

Wrylies, parentheticals, actor direction … there are several ways to refer to the line of text under character’s name, wrapped in parentheses, often indicating action to be paired with the forthcoming dialogue in a traditional screenplay. Many times, these wrylies are necessary, but closely examine your use of them to avoid going overboard. Does the action really accompany the speech? Then use a wryly. If not, consider writing it as action description. Too many wrylies can sour the reading experience.

Dialogue Example 7

The parentheses are overkill and make the dialogue hard to digest. Instead, try:

Dialogue Example 8

The latter example is much easier to read and implies enough through dialogue, rendering wrylies futile.

Just like that, you can make over a screenplay with a few simple snips. So, watch out words! This screenwriter has a rewrite coming for you.

Happy screenwriting,

Courtney Meznarich, Director of Community Outreach


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